Essay R

I would give Essay R a C- if I were grading it. This essay contained many grammatical errors including incorrect punctuation, sentence fragments, changes in tenses and typos. Perhaps having proof read would have been of benefit as it could have at the least eliminated the simple mistakes of typing the wrong word. In addition, I feel this essay was poorly organized. There was little to no transition between paragraphs. Also, it was difficult to distinguish the overall purpose of each paragraph. Maybe outlining the points in the opening that would be made through out the essay would have made it easier to read and understand. I liked how in the ending the counterargument was presented that some may disagree that the wrestling industry has evolved over the last few years but details to support the claim would have been beneficial. Although the writer seemed to have a passion for the industry and much knowledge, I believe better planning and more organization is needed.